Vendor Management - The most Pleases ever!

Email sent to 150 employees:

I am pleased to announce that request forms for IT Vendor Management Services are now located in the IT Services Catalog within ServiceNow.  Please use these pages to request Vendor Management services in place of e-mail requests.  If you are a frequent (or not so frequent) requestor of services please familiarize yourself with these pages as there are several required fields that must be completed.  These pages are only accessible to IT users.

In addition to vendor sourcing and contracting support, for IT Service Owners that would like consulting and assistance in creating a vendor performance management plan, please use the "IT Vendor Performance Management Consulting Request" page to make the request.  PLEASE NOTE that it will be the responsibility of the IT Service Owner to perform the on-going management of the plan, and at this time these services DO NOT include vendor performance management score cards.

For all general or miscellaneous requests please use the IT Vendor Management General Request page.

Please contact xxxxxxxx @ ext. 7575 if you have any questions.


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"For IT Vendor Management Contracts, see the IT Services Catalog in ServiceNow.  Request Vendor Management Plans, Vendor NDAs, and other Contract needs through this system.  These pages replace email requests, and are only accessible to IT users.

"If questions, contact xxxxxxxx at ext. 7111.

Volunteer Rake

There is still time to volunteer!!  If you would like to participate, please reply to this email by Friday.  This community service opportunity only takes a few hours of your Saturday morning, and is a fun and rewarding chance to volunteer. Bags will be provided, but we encourage all volunteers to bring labeled rakes, gloves, warm layered clothes, bottled water, etc.

We are also asking some volunteers to bring dollies and leaf blowers, so please let us know if you can bring a dolly or leaf blower.

When you reply, please indicate the names of the volunteers (children are allowed if you feel they are able to perform the tasks required).

Thank you for volunteering!
xxx and yyy (Rake up Crew Captains)



Not a horrible email, but busy enough.

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There is still time to volunteer for Rake-up the Town this Saturday.  It takes only a few hours and it is fun and rewarding.  

If you can help, reply with the names of who is volunteering.  Children are welcome, if they are old enough to help.  
 
Leaf bags are provided, but we encourage you to bring labeled rakes, gloves, warm layered clothes, and bottled water.  We also need volunteers to bring dollies and leaf blowers; drop us a note for our inventory.   

Thank you for volunteering!
xxx and yyy (Rake up Crew Captains)

Seen in Pocatello, Idaho.
Could be a joke, but still nice to see